thoughts on "looking for something lost"

so maybe i should try and write the homework later so that i have more people to bounce it off of. the only people i've been able to bounce it off was the blenderlid. he thought that overall the story was good, only a few things that bothered him personally. they bothered me too, so i went through again a couple times to edit. but to me, it seems a little clunky still. maybe, eventually, i can get invisiblepinkink along with nameless to help and add their concrit.

i feel that this should be a kind of "making of" type thing.
the events that have unfolded recently have just left me a little dazed and just utterly broken. essentially, when you give someone a choice, you want them to make a certain one. when they don't, it hurts. but you can't really force that upon them, right? it's a choice. also, in this society, we all put up fronts. we are all hypocrites (in the sense that hypocrite was used in ancient greece, meaning an actor) as we only show the good parts of us. if someone asks "how are you" the default answer is always "good" or "fine." if you say anything but, people freak out. (some a little more than others... and with good reason. sometimes. it's not bad to care about people, is it?) and though we may think that no one else is going through the same thing, everyone is. everyone has their own labyrinth with their own monsters. the only differences are the extent of complexity and ghastliness of the labyrinth and the personal demons. so, in essence, this story is based off of the feeling when someone's gotten in so deep getting to know you, and then pulls out as quickly as they came in. a part of you is lost, and you go looking for that in other people. you put up a stronger front (that someone will eventually be able to break again) and keep on looking. you kind of blind yourself to the feelings of others, because you're searching for that one thing that's missing. and you can't really ever find it.